The pic would be fine for the Art Portal, but there was no real effort put intothis as a Flash movie.
I would actually suggest submitting this to the Art Portal. As I said (assuming you drew it) it would fit there (It's not too bad of a pic), just don't stick some half assed flash with 2 repeating frames of animation and a single annoying sound clip on the Movie Portal next time.
This isn't too bad. I kind of like your style and I think that you could definitely make a series out of this with a bit of refinement.
The animation was good for the most part, but felt a little stiff at times (mostly the movement of papers). I liked the way you animated the cigarette. The movement of the cigarette was probably one of if not the most fluid moving thing here. (it did still feel a tad bit choppy though)
The facial expressions of papers were definitely good. I like how you managed to show how sad he was while still making it clear that he is an optimistic person. The lip sinc was decent as well, but I thought that the shapes his mouth made didn't always look right if you get what I mean. Like... His mouth looked like he was saying something different than what he was really saying.
The audio was good for the most part but, like the description says, squeakonia definitely has to go. I found it really annoying the first time I watched this. It wasn't so bad the second time, but it still bothered me. I liked the angry voice of the second dollar that papers had stolen from him. Its voice managed to be both funny and suiting. Papers had a great voice too. He sounded optimistic, yet broken and sad as well. Actually, he sounds like Bob from The Oblongs. Subtitles when the landlord was talking would've been nice too, but I was able to understand him, so no big deal.
As requested, here's the rest of your review that you sent me:
"The backgrounds were nice as well. The background when Papers got mugged was decent but I really liked the Background aroung his home.
Overall, I reallly liked this for the most partand I definitely thik you should continue this.
<Review Request Club>
Also, while this did have a couple of slightly funny moments, I don't think it would count as a comedy movie in its current state. Too sad."
So, like several others, you would seem to agree that the overall work could use refinement and it's too depressing. I'm glad you enjoyed my cartoon, Thanks for your input.
Contrary to most of the other reviewers, I didn't really notice that Wales was shaped like the country until after I finished watching and read the reviews. I probably should've noticed that.
Anyways, the animation here is reallygood and there are a good number of small details in the background that make this flash look better like the atmosphere and the ceiling chunk. The only problem I have with it is that I feel like Gary the Senators (that IS the centaur guy, right?) mustache should've moved just a bit more when he talked.
The voice acting is really good as well and manages not to sound over the top or fake. I really like the voices here actually, did you do them yourself? Anyways, your choice of sound effects and voicesand whatnot were really good.
Well, I don't really have much else to say that wouldn't be repeating everyone else (like the aannoyingly abrupt ending), so I'll just leave you my score and be on my way. Goodjob.
The animation in that was really good, it was definitely an improvement from your TF 2 lip sinc test, but don't know how much effort you put into that, so it might be an unfair comparison. Still, good job on the animation. How long have you animated?
I did notice an error or two though. First, right before that guy ran off the cliff at the end of the first part, he turned white for a second. Not a big deal, but just something I happened to notice. The other thing I noticed (although it was more likely intentional than an error) was how the arm of the guy holding the lamp was contorted in an awkward position when he got that "dramatic look" on his face.
On another good note, I think you did a really good job with the scene transitions. There is a really smooth transition between the games.
Lastly, I like how you put a heavy (pun not really intended) emotional feel of sacrifice on the Tean Fortress 2 part. I never really think much of people dying in front of me (or blowing up Medics and/or Heavies) but tou almost made me feel bad.
Overall, you're pretty good at this and I'll be sure to watch your stuff in the future! Great work!
First of all, thank you for another helpful review. I did this about 4 or 5 days.
The first error you saw was intended to some sort of "opposite" perspective where the first guy is shaded white before he escapes for his life, and alex mercer as the last guy is shaded black where he failed to escape and fell to his death.
the second one was also intended to have a little distorted humour with his arm just to fit it with "that" meme face.
Wow. That was actually really good.
The animation was really good. I kind of wish it was in color, but it was still good.
The humor was actually decent as well and I think you did a good job of stitching the voice clips together without sounding weird. The lip sinc to the voices was really good as well and I think you can do some amazing things in the future.
I like how you made the red spy drive him to the doctor like he was his father. Great reference to the meet the spy video.
Overall, good video. I'm actually really impressed with the quality of this submission!
Thank you very much T^T no one has ever reviewed my work like yours.
It is really different here in new grounds. keep up on being a good critique over work of others. I really appreciate every word you have stated.
I'm not gonna lie...
No really, I'm not making an immature joke, that was just bad.
The animation was mediocre at best, the voices were stupid, the joke was terrible, there just didn't seem to be alot of effort put into it.
I really feel like I wasted my time on this.
Try harder next time.
That was great. Animation, story, all of that stuff. Especially for your first flash.
I started out thinking the date part was kind of sweet, then I wondered what was going on with Orange clock. (and the others) I soon started understanding both stories, but wondering how they were connected.
I can't believe it, but I kinda jumped when I realized that the bullet was going to hit Orang Clock and I actually felt bad.
When I saw the picture in his hat, I got a little angry and shocked inside and then felt pissed at Balloon Clock (I think she was a balloon.)
In the end, I saw that this video actuallly had some slightly deeper meaning and I applaud you for managing to stir up my emotions a bit through the internet. Good job.
He knew it was a cat not orange clock.
Actually kind of funny.
I'm not goint to lie, alot (most) clock crew movies don't really make me laugh at all, but I caught myself chuckle at this once or twice.
Even though there wasn't much actual animation, there were a few moments that had some fluid animation. I appreciated those moments, as they really stood out in a good way.
The intro was a little funny at first and then the song you used there made it great (20% cooler perhaps?) The song at the end was kind of ear rape-ish though.
All in all, not a terrible clock flash and I really liked the voice for bb10.
That wasn't too bad.
I don't know what it is, but that music always makes me want to bob my head to it, I just like that song for some reason.
I like the basic Idea for this video and thought you did a good job of making it into a clock flash and the animation is good too. (there isn't really much animation, but whatever)
All in all, not bad for a clock flash and it leaves me wondering- Where the hell is Blob Clock?
come home blob, we miss you :(
I think it's cool that you were nice enough to mak a timer for other people, but...
-It'll only be good fo a short time
-It's just a timer, nothing really makes it stand out
-What's gonna happen in the future when Skyward Sword does come out?
-The EXACT time people can pick it up varies for people around the world (time zones and slightly differing release dates)
-It might be better (and more suitable) with a relaxing background music and possibly a mute button
-It serves it's purpose
-The text and art used is nice
-You were nice enough to do this for other fans (actually, I'll give you a six instead of a five because of this)
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