The pic would be fine for the Art Portal, but there was no real effort put intothis as a Flash movie.
I would actually suggest submitting this to the Art Portal. As I said (assuming you drew it) it would fit there (It's not too bad of a pic), just don't stick some half assed flash with 2 repeating frames of animation and a single annoying sound clip on the Movie Portal next time.
This isn't too bad. I kind of like your style and I think that you could definitely make a series out of this with a bit of refinement.
The animation was good for the most part, but felt a little stiff at times (mostly the movement of papers). I liked the way you animated the cigarette. The movement of the cigarette was probably one of if not the most fluid moving thing here. (it did still feel a tad bit choppy though)
The facial expressions of papers were definitely good. I like how you managed to show how sad he was while still making it clear that he is an optimistic person. The lip sinc was decent as well, but I thought that the shapes his mouth made didn't always look right if you get what I mean. Like... His mouth looked like he was saying something different than what he was really saying.
The audio was good for the most part but, like the description says, squeakonia definitely has to go. I found it really annoying the first time I watched this. It wasn't so bad the second time, but it still bothered me. I liked the angry voice of the second dollar that papers had stolen from him. Its voice managed to be both funny and suiting. Papers had a great voice too. He sounded optimistic, yet broken and sad as well. Actually, he sounds like Bob from The Oblongs. Subtitles when the landlord was talking would've been nice too, but I was able to understand him, so no big deal.
As requested, here's the rest of your review that you sent me:
"The backgrounds were nice as well. The background when Papers got mugged was decent but I really liked the Background aroung his home.
Overall, I reallly liked this for the most partand I definitely thik you should continue this.
<Review Request Club>
Also, while this did have a couple of slightly funny moments, I don't think it would count as a comedy movie in its current state. Too sad."
So, like several others, you would seem to agree that the overall work could use refinement and it's too depressing. I'm glad you enjoyed my cartoon, Thanks for your input.
Contrary to most of the other reviewers, I didn't really notice that Wales was shaped like the country until after I finished watching and read the reviews. I probably should've noticed that.
Anyways, the animation here is reallygood and there are a good number of small details in the background that make this flash look better like the atmosphere and the ceiling chunk. The only problem I have with it is that I feel like Gary the Senators (that IS the centaur guy, right?) mustache should've moved just a bit more when he talked.
The voice acting is really good as well and manages not to sound over the top or fake. I really like the voices here actually, did you do them yourself? Anyways, your choice of sound effects and voicesand whatnot were really good.
Well, I don't really have much else to say that wouldn't be repeating everyone else (like the aannoyingly abrupt ending), so I'll just leave you my score and be on my way. Goodjob.
Not gonna make this longer than it needs to be. It looks like you blatantly copied a Stencyl Tutorial. I've never used said program, but the dialogue is a pretty dead giveaway.
On another note, even if it wasn't a blatantly copied tutorial, there's no real gameplay here anyways.
This isn't portal material. Make something bigger, practice a little, put shit on your dumping grounds and post it in the forums if you need help and suggestions. Newgrounds can be a pretty supportive community, but there's no reason for this to be here on the Flash Portal.
All of the mini games here are at least pretty good which is awesome, but some were better than others for sure.
I did like all of them, but my favorite one for sure was the white board one. It was pretty good, but the jumping precision could've been better. One thing that could've made that one better is if you had a limited amount ofstuff to build the platforms with and could get more by defeating enemies.
The chicken one was my favorite one graphics wise, but the biggest flaws were the slow speed of the box and the fact that the sheer amount of chickens made my laptop lag. Also, they went in front of the HUD, but that wasn't too big of a deal.
I think the bike one was decent as well, but the main problem I had was that I went backwards so slow that it killed me alot. It's not bad though. Also, I was wondering what the lights were for.
Ahh, the brick defender mini-game. We meet again... I've already reviewed the full version of that, so I'm not gonna say much here. I liked it alot.
Pong... I don't think I even need to say anything about that. It's kind of cool that it was here though.
I didn't get the point of the one with the bees, but it was fun until my laptop started to lag... It had nice graphics though.
I liked Sky Runner quite a bit as well. I did have a similar problem with this one and the bike one. I backed up too slow. The actual gameplay was pretty good though and I really liked the Arwing graphic.
The dancing one... The graphics were good, but it was a little boring. It wasn't too bad though. :)
Overall, this was pretty good. I hope I didn't leave one out...
Not bad, but I'd say it could use quite a bit of work.
The graphics aren't great, but at least they improve as the flash goes on. You should try your best to keep the graphics consistent throughout the whole flash.
The music is okay, but after a short while, it starts to get repetative and quite boring. Not long after, it starts to get annoying. Maybe you should try to change th music every few levels to keep it less annoying.
The actual game play is good for the most part, but in some parts the path was way to thin to make it through without a ton of tries, which can get really frustrating even if you could see the mouse.
You know, this game reminds meof those parts on the impossible quiz where your mouse would go invisible.
Overall, this was a decent attempt at this relatively uncommon type of gameplay and I commend you for that.
Damn, this would be amazing BGM.
This song is really good. Like everyone else has said, it has an adventrous feel to it.
The name is really fitting. It has that icy feel to it that would work well in some cave or ice level. I hope someone actually puts this in a flash game.
The melody is good, but I like the bouncy sounds that jump from ear to ear most. It makes we want to look in the direction of the sound really bad. Kind of annoying, but it definitely shows that you accomplished something with them, right?
I know that I'm supposed to critique anything that's not good about things, but I don't really have a problem with anything, so... Yeah...
Overall, really good and true to the 8-bit genre. Love it. Hope to hear more.
(Fuck, I could not form actual paragraphs for this review. Sorry bro.)
Thanks for the review man!
I'm stoked that you thought it was that good. I hope someone uses it in a game too.
Sounds kind of dark.
There are happy parts for sure, but they only really come from the Windwaker songs. Still though, dark isn't bad. I think you did a really good job on this.
The big thing here is how well the songs all flow together. The different songs all transition into each other really well. I especially that transition into the Gerudo Valley theme.
One thing that bugged me is how fast the first five or so songs flew by. There just wasn't enough glory given to them. That being said though, they all still work very well together in the beginning, so no harm done.
The ending... Uhhg... Not bad, but it just cuts off too soon, leaving the song feeling incomplete. I feel like it's going to keep going and then it stops. That's my only real problem with this.
Back on the bright side, I think the instrumentation is really well done. You always chose the best instrument for each part, which really helped this song.
Overall, great interpretation of many tunes from one of the first video game series I ever played that really captured and combined the emotions of each tune into an epic song.
i'd be lying if i didn't hear the rushed pace of the first 5, but i was more concerned about finishing the song and getting all the parts just right lol.
as for the ending, i thought it fell perfectly in place, with a heavy bass hit that concluded the piece without too much cinematic anticipation. but remember, there will be more with this soon ;)
again, thank you for your input!!!
I love your music.
Well, now that I've said that, time for the actual review.
The first thing I noticed right off the bat was how calm and happy this made me feel. It fits the title for the most part.
The guitar that comes in about a third of the way through carries a nice melody and, I don't know how you'll feel about me saying this, but it makes me imagine Rainbow Dash helping Scootaloo learn to fly. I know this isn't really a pony song, but I just had to say that.
Anyways, another great thing about this is the way instruments kind of layer as the song progresses and really gives it a nice flow.
I know reviews are supposed to haave things you can improve, but I don't really have anything negative to say. This is just a great song with a calm, happy feel to it.
Also, this isn't relevent to this song, but I still want to write lyrics to your song "Universe" eventually. I might not have time until summer break, but I do want to do that someday. You know, this song could use lyrics too...
Thanks for the review! I'm glad you like my music. xD
It was made to make me calm and happy, so I hope that it makes everyone else calm and happy.
What a dream.
WHOLE REVIEW (kindly sent to me via PM):
"What a dream.
I want to start off by saying that the surrealism in this piece is really well done here. There is a lot going on, and it all manages to flow together really well.
The Balloon (obviously the main part of the piece) looks really good. I like the way you shaped the mouth, it has this weird shape to it that still looks like a fish mouth. The scarves also seem really out of place, yet at the same time manage to look natural as fins. Really nice touch on the surrealism there. The fire is done pretty well too and I like the way it roasts the birds. It is a really humorous touch that helps boost the piece quite a bit. I also laughed a bit at how the roasted birds have that classic look a roasted bird has in those old cartoons like Tom and Jerry.
The sleeping couple really does a nice job of completing the picture. It really says "Hey! This is a dream!" Probably the best part about them (for me anyways) is the broken tether. It just shows how unstable a dream can be. Anything can happen. You can be peaceful and oblivious, and next thing you know, you fall out of everything into a rude awakening. It just has a suspensful feel that makes you worry about the fte of the sleeping couple.
The only problem is light shading in some areas as has been pointed out already.
Overall though, good job on this piece. I think you're prettty good with watercolors.
<Review Request Club> "
Thank you very much for the lengthy review!
I honestly don't know what to say other than i'm glad you like it! Yeah, I didn't want it to be taken too seriously so i added some humorous stuff in there.
Thanks for noticing the broken tether, though i'm a little sad that no one has mentioned "The Godfather" yet. They're sleeping with the flying fish now, and soon they'll actually be sleeping with the fishes!
Sorry for the crap reply.
(and no worries about the review glitch or whatever).
I really like the design you've got gooing here, it looks really good.
One of the big things here is the style of architecture you have here. It reallly fits what [I think] you were going for here. The pillars all look reallygood and the arch at the entrance has alot of detail which, like I said, helps that feel you were going for.
Another thing that really looks good here is the color scheme. I don't know why but I really like the colors you used here. They all really look good and help this picture to be the best it could be.
All of the small details help this picture, but I don't think I really need to point them all out, I mean, the picture is right there.
The only problem I noticed is how the roof and wall of building in the upper right seem to just flow together instead of the roof hanging off like on the rest of that building. I'm kind of having trouble explaining...
Anyways, really good picture with minimal flaws. I'm impressed.
Hey, sorry for the late response.
I see what you mean with the roof issue, I'll try to be more wary of making all the roofs more similar and accurate next time, I'm glad you caught that mistake. :)
I really tried to stick to a traditional color scheme, even if some of the textures are a little fantasized.
Thanks for the review,
Haven't really played Skyrim...
But this is pretty good.
There are good things about this and there are ferw. not so good things.
I like how you put alot of detail into the face. The scales that are textured enough to not look flat, The cracks on it's lower jaw, The spikes that border his face,and some other things.
Another detail that is really interesting and in my opinion adds a littlestory to this image ishow the spike on the left side of its chin is broken. It jusr helps by showing that this dragon has been through stuff.
I do have two complaints. First, the white background. it's just really plain and just makes your image seem less interesting.
The second complaint I have is The fact that there is no neck. I know you called it a bust, but the lack of a neck just makes this look weird. Kind of reminds me of a dissembodied ant head. I think it would've helped if you at least put a stump of a neck coming out of his head to make it look more like a bust.
Overall, it's a good picture, but it just feels incomplete.
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